Comments on: Don’t put our client on the stand

By: lawminx

lawminx — Tue, 04 Sep 2007 07:41:22 +0000

Unfortunately I’m no good at the composition of verse;in fact the ONLY verse that, troublingly ,springs to mind at the moment is as follows:
The Boy stood on the Burning Deck with a pocket full of Crackers,
A Cinder went down his Trouser Leg And,
Blew off both his…..
Socks.
(affects Noel Coward type Accent) Ew, ThankYouVeryMuch….

By: contact

contact — Mon, 03 Sep 2007 18:56:41 +0000

Bigugly, thanks for the thought, but I think I prefer the revised Don Giovanni finale (for the moment).

And as for the big end(ians), surely only hacks, poetasters and unimaginative machos insist on a big climax every time. As evidence, I cite Mr Coward’s ‘Don’t put your daughter’, where not only is the best rhyme thrown in early on, but the Master felt his usual culmination to be unrewarding enough to add an extra verse on special occasions.

In addition, if Noel Coward felt that his ‘pop song’ needed such reliance on assonance as rhyming ‘christ’ and ’sufficed’, who are mere mortals to argue…

By: bigugly

bigugly — Mon, 03 Sep 2007 15:23:12 +0000

How about “sure to see him canned”

By: bigugly

bigugly — Mon, 03 Sep 2007 13:33:31 +0000

As Pope knew (and Coward too) the final rhyme of something such as this is built up to and is the climax. It must therefore be even better than those that have gone before, not only just as good as, or weaker. Have another train ride.
As for assonance, this is the kind of thing you’ld get in a pop song, and should be firmly eschewed.

By: contact

contact — Mon, 03 Sep 2007 12:24:13 +0000

The rhyming scheme is that of Mr Coward, save for the two exceptions that you rightly point to. Cut and up is an oblique rhyme (or an assonance) and the best I could do on the train home. Still, if Coward could rhyme due and too, or christ and sufficed, I might get away with it. Avoid is an error pure and simple, which I will blame on Network Rail and amend as soon as I can think of the replacement. - now done, although not well.

By: bigugly

bigugly — Mon, 03 Sep 2007 12:11:51 +0000

Very nice, but rhyming verse would have been better. For the record “cut” doesn’t rhyme with “up”, and “avoid doesn’t rhyme with “stand”. But good on the rhythm.

By: contact

contact — Sun, 02 Sep 2007 22:09:16 +0000

Thanks both, but I’m not sure about more rhyming posts - it seems to have finished Corporate Blawg off entirely doing the Blawg Review. Put this down to the silly season and no higher court judgments to mull over.

By: the chief

the chief — Sun, 02 Sep 2007 21:13:44 +0000

Truly brilliant and I am hereby starting a campaign for more posts in rhyme. Sadly the best that I have been able to come up with is (with sincere apologies to Mr Coward):
Mad dogs and those gone wrong blog in the form of song
Which is neither the message I’m trying to get across, nor very good. All of which presumably only goes to show that in my case Vodka Martinis do not aid the creative process.

By: The Pupil

The Pupil — Sat, 01 Sep 2007 07:28:24 +0000

quite brilliant! P